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Post world and story concepts here so they may viewed and discussed.

Ice-water satellite (moon). Probably a moon to a very big planet, farther out in the solar system. The surface is ice, and the inside is water, caused by heating from its core. Perhaps technology has allowed for humans (among other undecided races) to get under the ice and explore the waters - where we may very well have several species living. There could also be an underwater colony for the humans to live and study the satellite. Access is most likely limited, however.

Add on, guys! Races you may find, a name for the place, any other details you can think of.

Asche. (ah▪sheh) A relatively small town on Erclesse that runs on steam power. Supposedly had one of the top hospitals in its area, but it has since shut down. (Their new one isn't so bad, though.) The townspeople are generally friendly, if a bit old-fashioned. The buildings of the housing district all tend to look similar, and the business district probably only differs a little with its shorter buildings, orange lights and awnings. Vapor is constantly wisping around the town, and tends to bottle up warmth; in winter, it's less cold than it should be.

Armistant / The Electric City. A hub of operation for the Organization, and a technologically advanced city, not unlike some of the major cities today (Tokyo, New York). It is filled with skyscrapers, and it is much taller than it is wide. Rather than the usual city format of a dense center surrounded by looser suburbia, the city is organized by layers.

Half of the city is built on a platform suspended above the ground, and is subject to natural light. The other half rests below the platform, and is only lit artificially, whether by timed electrical lighting or some other simulated means. The lower half is more of the 'slums' district.

Edited 2010-02-26 17:54 (UTC)

The name me and Endy are discussing using is Circle Seven. It would reflect seven different divisions within the mafia that carried out different tasks (For example, there could be an intel branch, a supplies branch, a defense branch, etc). In addition to this, the name would also reflect 7 vows that recruits have to take on upon entering, which would be something of a list of dos and don'ts, like some sort of mafia code to swear by.

The overall goal of this organization is to secure financial dependence of a planetary/national majority, and with their influence, force the governing bodies into a more unified system. This is with the intention of doing away with high tariffs, unfair interplanetary restrictions, inescapable class and living conditions of those living on "dead planets," and a lot of other stuff that isn't right with the solar system's shaky system of trade and communication! As a bonus, if this plan succeeded, it would likely put their organization in a position of influence over the whole solar system. -- This organization does a lot of major military lending and such, however, so there's a little bit of grey area that comes into play since they're essentially helping what they are fighting against, which is fragmented planetary rule and ongoing interplanetary strife.

Edited 2010-04-25 13:32 (UTC)

The Fourth Circle is located a good distance away from the headquarters (the First Circle), closer to the center of the planetary system. It specializes in information gathering and selling, and has a reputation for being very slow with personal requests until you follow up with them, considering the volume of information they handle on a day-to-day basis.

The leader of this division is unspecified, but I would recommend a member of a separate race that is known for SUPER SMARTS or something. (Live long and prosper, folks.)

Erclesse / The Dock City. Though the mafia operates with a large-scale free-reign ship as their headquarters, Erclesse stands as one of their major 'docks' for the ship and its members to dock. It is used as a major 'gateway' for mafia members to gain access to the rest of the planetary system, and also serves as the bottleneck for transportation back to the headquarters ship.

Shouldn't this be 'The Dock Planet'?

Astaron / The Aquatic Planet. The surface of this planet is covered by water. Astaron holds one of the major races of the story - a humanoid fish race (Quelorie is a member). The members of this race have no hair, their skin is a pale blue, and they require to be constantly hydrated (at least five hours in water a day). Their voices, when speaking, resemble a mix between talking and gurgling as a result of their distinct respiratory system. They have harder shell-like crests on the top of their head, and extensions from the back that are almost coral-like in nature (their version of hair, I suppose).

Gladsheim / The Debtor Planet. Originally one of the collaborators with the mafia, Gladsheim has long since fallen into debt for buying large amounts of weapons to back up their constant state of civil dispute. In a semi-mutiny, the military of Gladsheim has taken matters into their own hands and formed a rebellion group against the mafia, outright attacking the First Circle and stealing shipments of weapons with no intention to pay or take responsibility. They are the main antagonist group as of this moment.

Joel Foster’s first mission as Special Ops Commander was at planet Erclesse’s city Asche, to ‘ask’ (force) cooperation of the doctors with their mission: to create superhuman weapons. Asche Hospital was ideal – aside from being the biggest in its area with the best doctors, it had the best reputed prosthetics maker, Bentley A. Foster; his brother and a genius at twenty-three with his creations. He had utilized the best of myoelectric technology, making the most advanced prosthetics Erclesse had seen. People said it was no different than having an arm of flesh. He was a key person they needed for their mission.

Three years after Bentley began work at Asche Hospital (age 26), the Gladsheim military slowly began to have a silent hold on the facility. The doctors readily gave their cooperation through the military’s subtle threats. For three more years, they quietly obeyed the orders of Commander Foster. It simply grew into something they got used to; an authority they dared not to oppose. (Horror stories had spread about the ones who did – having their limbs chopped off, being used for the military experiments themselves, their families taken hostage… Or worse.)

Unable to stand his brother’s tyranny any longer, Bentley rebelled. He was tired of being used to make ‘super human’ parts for the military’s wars. The other doctors knew just as well as he did that they were creating weapons not intended to protect. A courageous young man at the time, he gathered other doctors for his cause, convincing them that they could no longer put up with the unethical treatment of their patients, and the abuse of their skills. But when word got out of Bentley’s rebellion, Joel didn’t hesitate for a moment to punish those involved. Feeling he had no choice now but to force his brother’s cooperation, the commander used aggressive means. He put a stipulation to the rebelling doctors’ consequences: he wouldn’t punish them if they turned on Bentley. If the doctors cut off his arm, thereby forcing Bentley to make himself one, he would let them off the hook. The answer was obvious, wasn’t it? Either sacrifice the safety of their families, or just take one doctor’s arm, which could be so easily replaced – the choice was easy.

Age 29, Bentley was changed. Not just in the empty space now from his elbow down, or the low blood pressure now coursing his veins, but the betrayal of the people he thought had the bravery to do what was right. The people he once considered his friends. A lone man, with no family at home to question his whereabouts, it was easy to force his stay at the hospital. He was a troublemaker, after all. Commander Joel ordered him to be under strict supervision, lest he rouse more havoc. It was easy to say that nearly a year in the confines of the hospital drove him a little mad – a little quirky. But at 30, Bentley made his escape. It only took him a few months to make a prosthetic for himself, but oh, was it fine-tuned to suit him. His best creation yet – his masterpiece. He spent the latter part of the year making the prosthetics as the military wished, all the while adding details to his own to make his getaway. It was a day with Commander Joel Foster himself was to keep watch over his dear little brother. (He wasn’t always at the hospital, being a busy commander – there were other missions that required his attention.) The year had instilled a fear of the military in Bentley, but that day, he made his move. Bentley attacked his brother, very easily overpowering Joel with the metal arm – more than intended. It horrified Bentley, that the unrefined metal could cut through the thin skin of a human’s neck with so much ease, but there was no time for it. He dashed through back rooms, halls, past the militant security, and to his freedom.

The hospital closed shortly after Bentley’s retreat, the military’s commander being in a critical state. All evidence of their operation was quickly eradicated. Bentley wasn’t safe, he knew, and nor was Asche – without their hospital, the city was bound to face a crisis. As much as it enraged him, he had to leave. He couldn’t do anything for them now. It was barely a week of hiding in plain sight before he found himself kidnapped – by the mafia, no less. Two annoying little henchmen (or angels, one might argue) that swooped him away.

Prompt member discussion by asking questions about the story elements you want addressed.

IS BENTLEY EVIL?!

NO

YES

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Edited 2010-02-20 17:32 (UTC)

Name: Viana Florentina Dominico
Age: 23
Race/Ethnicity: Human / Latin American roots
Sex/Gender: Female

Body Type: Small, no curves whatsoever, limber.
Physical Abnormalities: There are scars all over Viana's body, though it's mostly concentrated in the abdomen and limb areas.
Physical Performance Level: Fit; Viana is used to physical exercise, though she's no athlete. She is pretty good at climbing up places and jumping around, though - like parkour, only to a lesser degree.
Mental Condition: Quite sane, thank you.

Personality: Viana is a short fuse, to say the least, but for a girl with such a small supply of patience, she has ambitions larger than her hometown could offer. Viana has a very no-nonsense attitude, which carries over from personal to professional life; she doesn't take attitude from anyone but seems more than eager to dish it out. Despite that, she answers dutifully to her boss and to her brother (though hardly to anyone else). She is very passionate regarding things she believes in. Don't be fooled, either. Regardless of first impressions, Viana secretly loves things like romance novels (even if she has no experience with love) and cute memorabilia. She's still a girl, after all.

Brief History: Born ninth in a family with twelve children, Viana grew up in an environment where you had to fight for everything - for the last bite, for a place to sit, for attention. As a result, she spent most of her adolescence waiting for the day where she'd leave it behind. When she did, she quickly realized that it wasn't as glamorous as she expected, but Viana is adaptable above all else. She hardened quickly, and jaded just as fast. Since being recruited into the Organization (an infinitely more attractive choice than the red light districts or trafficking drugs), she works with her brother on odd jobs, though the pair specializes in abduction and reconnaissance.

Personal Goals: Viana needs to learn to let someone into her bubble of a private world, currently consisting of only herself and her brother. She needs to form more human connections. After leaving her family, she's come to believe that she doesn't need them, but she's wrong.

Birthday: April 17th
Favorite Food: Chicken Quesadilla
Catchphrase/Catchword: N/A
Strong point: Viana can handle almost any type of firearm. She's rather a natural with them. Unfortunately.
Weak point: Viana has a terrible temper; she could stand to listen to people more often. And she could use longer pants.
Fears: Death, growing old.
Quirks: Reading cheesy shoujo manga, dying her hair every color of the rainbow. Naturally, her hair is a strawberry blond.
Likes: Cream soda, fruit gum, daytime soap operas.
Dislikes: Being talked down to, being treated like a child, cauliflower.

Edited 2012-01-28 21:03 (UTC)

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Edited 2010-08-18 17:30 (UTC)

Name: Daniel Owen Garamond
Nickname: Danny
Age: 19
Race/Ethnicity: Human
Sex/Gender: Male

Body Type: Fairly average height and a weight. A little bit of muscle tone, but mostly in the arms and abs.
Physical Abnormalities: Probably has some kind of cool tattoo like a lot of the family members.
Physical Performance Level: Although he can throw a punch as good as the next guy, he's not particularly strong. However he's incredibly quick, and can outrun most people. (A skill he probably gained running away from fights.)
Mental Condition: He's unreasonable, but fairly sane.

Personality: It's easy to understand Danny within the first five minutes of meeting him. Because he was given anything he wanted as a child (be it toys, candy, or attention), he's developed a rather spoiled personality. He expects to get what he wants when he wants it and often gets mad when people don't comply. Although he likes to think of himself as cool, he has no shame in displaying whatever emotion he's feeling at the time, which often makes him come off as an immature punk. (People who think this aren't wrong.) He's mostly all bark and no bite though, which tends to get him into trouble with people who are much stronger than himself. He's not particularly strong and has a very weak pain tolerance, so he'd much rather run than fight. However, he's incredibly loyal to the Boss.. So much so that if he was being tortured for information he'd die before saying anything.

Danny is obsessed with brand name clothes and fashion and has a horrible habit of throwing money around like it's nothing. (Because the truth is, being the boss's son, it really is nothing.)

Danny doesn't just sit around on his ass and waste money; he actually has to work just like everyone else! (Well he probably doesn't HAVE to. But he does.) Danny is an extremely skilled sharpshooter and has almost flawless aim. He specializes in long-range shooting (high powered rifles/sniping/etc.), which normally puts him carrying out assassinations or backing up people carrying out potentially dangerous exchanges/missions. However, his fast running speed and good aim make him incredibly skilled in a regular gunfight as well. (Most people probably don't realize that he's actually good at anything, though...)

Brief History: Son of the Boss and his second wife. He doesn't remember his mother because she was killed when he was very young (only 2 or 3). He has no idea about the Boss's first wife or that he has a half brother. He's had a fairly easy life.. He was totally spoiled by the boss and as a result the two of them are really close. No particularly traumatizing events.

Personal Goals: Doesn't really have any! Doesn't really know what he wants to do with his life. Hasn't really thought about it... But he'd probably like to find a girlfriend and maybe start his own fashion line someday. (Sounds like an oxymoron...)

Birthday: May 17
Favorite Food: Filet mignon
Catchphrase/Catchword: "AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!"
Tagline: "A sharp dresser... and an even sharper shooter!"
Strong point: An excellent marksman. He can hit any moving target from a fairly far distance. He also knows everything about the latest fashions.
Weak point: Incredibly vain. He hates getting dirty if he doesn't have to. Cowardly. Immature and self-centered.
Fears: Being alone. Getting his ass kicked.
Quirks:
Likes: Fashion, yappy dogs, the Boss.
Dislikes: Pain, scary people (ie. Viana, Calibri), people who don't care about their appearance.

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Edited 2010-08-18 17:49 (UTC)

Name: Victor Hales Garamond
Age: 45
Race/Ethnicity: Caucasion; Middle-European; Olive skin tone
Sex/Gender: Male

Body Type: Broad shouldered and lean-muscled
Physical Abnormalities: He has a large gash that runs over almost the entire right side of his face. His right eyeball is fake, and it's appearance often alternates thanks to Garamond's interest in collecting unique glass eyeballs. He has an impressive collection of scars, and he can recall a story for most of them. From the dip of his shoulders down to his tail bone there is a large, decorative black ink tattoo that spans across the width of his back.
Physical Performance Level: For his age, he's quite fit. He enjoys physical activity, and he keeps himself in decent shape. He is an excellent fighter and can travel long distances without tiring. Although old age has slowed him down somewhat, his performance level is still comparable to how it was in his prime- although occasionally he complains of shoulder and back pain.
Mental Condition: Questionable.

Personality: Garamond can be quite intimidating if you cross him in the wrong circumstances. He has been known to be relentless and cruel to his enemies. He is also, however, extremely loyal and understanding with his own crew. He has been known to give second chances, an uncommon trait of mobsters. He seems to have an especial soft spot for children. At times it can seem like Garamond doesn't carry himself seriously, but he can be quite serious when the moment calls for it. He's a man of humor. A jokester, you could say (though his jokes are sometimes only funny to himself). He likes to carry an air of cheerfulness with him. Which is at times... almost creepy. It's a wonder that someone that has seen that many deaths can keep up such a composure -- not to mention he probably has more responsibilities than a high-status political figure.
Brief History: Garamond adopted the role of Circle Seven's head figure at the age of 22 due to the unexpected death of his father. By the age of 25, Garamond had been married twice and had two sons. The son of his first wife escaped from Circle Seven shortly after his mother's death and is presumed dead. Following the advice of the seven branch leaders, Garamond became the first leader to choose a successor that is not blood related. Despite this, his second son, Danny, still maintains a position of power in the circle. Although he ran into a few mishaps earlier in his career, Garamond has grown into a strong and respectable leader.
Personal Goals:

Birthday: August 18
Favorite Food: Black Cherry
Catchphrase/Catchword: N/A
Strong point: Hand-to-Hand combat, Luck, Improvisation, Foreign Language
Weak point: Video Games, Sniping, Art
Fears: N/A
Quirks:
Likes: Children, live theatre & performing arts, gambling, teasing Calibri
Dislikes:

Edited 2010-08-20 20:51 (UTC)

Songs that correspond with aspects of the story.

BIEBBZZZZZZ COME ON MAN

http://il.youtube.com/watch?v=4ZlWZqkOuCs

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xG-eUiVpXMA

whoops that was supposed to be a question mark so you guys could agree or disagree. I like the song but I dunno what I picture to it. 8);

Upon relistening, maybe a sneaking theme. Mission music??

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ED5J7jeMqFE

Dunno if you guys will like the tribal bits, but I still think it's pretty happenin'.

I say 100% yes. This theme is super A+++++.

I'd recommend it as the epic space battle theme. (I totally see Tootsie in a firefight to this theme.)

HECK YEAH.

except now i just imagined tootsie dressed as a firefighter (sexy)

....Kels, this has to be drawn now.
I'm waiting. :D

sdkhkjhfjkhr

... /puts on list

:D!!

Electrasy - Cosmic Castaway (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JKlMOblghiQ)

Bondo de Role - Marina Gasolina (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BXti8uvXpmI)

...The Seatbelts - Cosmic Dare (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B1vB1x_gFpo)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_sBZdSHAIZI

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Concepts

World

City

Armistant (consolidated)

Organization Name and Overall Goal

Fourth Circle

Erclesse (consolidated)

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Astaron

Gladsheim

Asche Hospital Incident: Bentley and Joel's TRAGIC PAST

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Questions

THE Question

Re: THE Question

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Main Characters

Viana Dominico

Evan Dominico

Nathan Calibri

Danny Garamond

Victor Hales Garamond

Bentley A. Foster

Soundtrack

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Gladsheim Theme

Plotting Theme?

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War Theme

Re: War Theme

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Bentley Foster's Theme

Viana Dominico

Re: Soundtrack